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Nursing is a long term goal for me, I want to get all the best schooling possible, and make my way up with the top nurses. But first; there is personal things you have to learn about nursing. Some of those things are the language of nursing, they way to act, and the beliefs of a nursing community. There is a certain way to act when you are a nurse or any kind of person in the medical field because you can deal with very fragile people. You are dealing with patients, and their life is in your hands the moment they walk into the hospital. You never know if someone is very sensitive or not so you always have to act in a kind soft way. Depending on the situation, a lot of the times nurses are closer to the patient then the doctor is. You are the one that they first see and talk to, and sometimes even the last. Nurses have a very important job in the society. 

Following what I said earlier, I want everyone to know the importance of nurses in our community. Being a nurse can mean many things, and you play a big role in your patients medical life. Everyone thinks doctors are the most important but that's not true.Nurses are the intermediaries between their patients and the patients family; if something happens to the patient you are the one to report it to the family. Things may come to a very personal level depending on the situation. Being a nurse means you are the one to monitor the patient before he or she sees the doctor. You check to make sure everything is working okay. Doctors are the ones who initially find out what is wrong with you, and then they tell the nurse if you need any prescriptions  But the nurse is the one who gets them for you, and fills out the appropriate papers for you. There are many important jobs of being a nurse, and I just named a few.

Homework 2/7

1.    If you were to focus on one of your discourses on your discourse mind map in an essay, which would you choose? Why? What makes it the most interesting?

As a future career nursing has always been a big priority to me. Nursing has many different parts to it, but the most important thing about nursing is that you get to help other people. Nurses are always the first person to help a patient and get to know them, I want to be that person.  If there is ever an opprutunity in a life time, this is mine.

2.    When did you first become interested in the discourse? What are your first memories from it? If you’re not in the discourse yet, what do you expect your first experiences to be like?

Ever since I was little all I could think about was wanting to help people. Mostly kids. So I’m thinking about going into pediatric nursing. I expect my first memories to be hard but memorable; I want to have relationships with my patients. I’m not expecting any of this to be easy but I’m in for the long ride, and am going to work my way up. Pediatric nursing is a great experience for people who like helping children medically.

3.    How did you acquire the discourse? Was it all acquisition? Was there any learning?

I haven’t learned much about this discourse yet, because I am still taking prerequisite classes. I am going to be doing a few job shadows of nurses around town to see exactly which kind I want to be. So far the information that I have learned is just being acquired it’s what I’ve seen other people doing. Nursing is a very difficult job.

4.    What are specific examples of the language that is used in the discourse?

Speaking kindly to others

            Using kind facial expressions

5.    What are specific examples of when certain behaviors/actions are used in the discourse?

Caring for people

Administers Medication

Supervises medical equipment

Intermediary between patients and their family

6.    How literate are you in the discourse? Have you achieved mastery?

I am not literate in this discourse at all, and no I have not achieved mastery. I still have to go through school to acquire mastery. Once I get my associates degree and my master’s degree, I will be on my way to success. Nursing takes a lot of hard work and effort.

Run-On Expository Paragraphs

1. Students should feel lucky to attend Green River Community College, it has a lot wonderful opportunities to explore nature.

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Students should feel lucky to attend Green River Community College; it has a lot of wonderful opportunities to explore nature. When walking around Green River beautiful cedar trees and forestry are seen everywhere. There are many trails from building to building. Without trees you would not have fresh air, which helps students have better health. Therefore the clean environment leads to an optimal study environment for students, impacting them in positive ways that other campuses cannot provide.

2. College textbooks are priced way too high, students find them to be a financial burden.

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College textbooks are priced way too high; students find them to be a financial burden. Normally at books stores, non-school related books are maybe thirty dollars at the most; but when you buy a school related book they can be hundreds of dollars. I have financial aid and can barely afford school then I had to buy three hundred dollars’ worth of books out of pocket money? Buying books for school can put financial stress on a lot of students.

3.       GRCC is a diverse school GRCC students can have many discourses.

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GRCC is a diverse school because the students have many discourses. There are so many different types of people at Green River that you may never meet. Every person has their own lifestyle and their own job. For example think of the thirty people who are in one of your classes, every person has a different job; so that makes 30 discourses in a single class. Now think of the thousands of students that attend Green River, which could make up thousands of discourses. Green River is a discourse, full of other discourses.

4.     I love to explore Seattle, Seattle has many interesting things to explore.

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I love to explore Seattle because; Seattle has many interesting things to explore. There are unlimited amounts of places to visit in Seattle. From Pike Place Market, to the Space Needle; there are endless possibilities of the places you could explore. Seattle is a very large city and known to many around the country. Seattle is the perfect place for tourists to go, even if you live in Washington; it’s fun to be a tourist for a day. Whenever a day is needed out of the house; Seattle is the perfect place to go to have fun and explore different opportunities.

5.       A smoking ban on campus is good for students not everyone should be exposed to cigarette smoke.

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A smoking ban on campus is good for students. Not everyone should be exposed to cigarette smoke. Many students have complained about walking by the smoking areas at school because they don’t want to be exposed to cigarette smoke. There are many cons of smoking cigarettes because you can get sick and it smells bad and sticks easily to hair and clothes. Nobody wants second hand smoke because it is even more dangerous than smoking itself, so that is why Green River Community College has put a smoking ban on.

Homework 2/5

An expository is a way of explaining something or portraying a message. When writing an expository paragraph you need to engage your critical thinking skills. When writing an expository paragraph there is usually always a critical point which is being explained. Almost all expository paragraphs have an argument that needs evidence and support to back it up. When writing an expository paragraph the purpose is to persuade others of the conclusion you came upon but you cannot do that without supporting your argument with evidence; your evidence can be person experiences, or of others.

There are different parts of an expository paragraph: the topic sentence, support and analysis, and the concluding sentence. The topic sentence is the controlling idea of the paragraph. It is the main part of the paragraph that establishes the topic and the purpose. Then there is the support and analysis. These are the sentences between the topic and conclusion sentences. You need to provide support to your topic sentence to back it up. Which includes examples, experiences, and proof of what you are trying to convince. Finally there is the concluding sentence. In this sentence you are re-emphasizing the topic sentence's focus and purpose. You never restate your topic sentence. But you do need to have the same idea as in your topic sentence.